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THE FIGHT
Once upon a time, actually it´s not so long ago anyway.
My story starts when my father is holding a party, for my mom. Romeo enters the door at Capulet's cave. I saw him first, so beautiful, so hot! My friend Jenny saw him right after me, but she was faster than me and she told me, that Romeo were hers.
A Montague have never bin into the house before, but there he stood. I saw that he was a little uncomfortable, but he looked proud. His friends were just around the corner, they smiled to me and I was a little shy. Jenny was already over by Romeo, but he did not notice her. He saw somewhere, I could not see where. It dawned me, that it was me he was looking at, our eyes met and I felt warm inside. I've always been told by my father that a Montague was an evil creature that the devil had created. I could see no evil in him, he was soft. His brown eyes wandered around in the room, I smiled. I walked down the steep stairs, quiet and stylish. But suddenly my cousin came to me and tells me to keep me away from him. I heard nothing, and went further down the stairs; it feels long, too long and yet so short.
20-09-2011
Dear diary.
I'm in love! He is the most beautiful I have ever seen! And yes! We have kissed, while the others partied, we stood on the terrace. I cannot keep my mind away from him. Romeo, my Romeo, where are you my Romeo
My dad is very angry with me; I may never see Romeo again. I'm so confused yesterday I danced and kissed Romeo and today I feel a loneliness that cannot be completed without him here. Why must love be so difficult, what is it the two names do not like about each other. Capulet and Montague, when you write it on paper they do not attack each other.

25-09-2011
Dear diary I do not live longer with my mom and my dad, me and Romeo is moved. We will now forever live happily together, never again war, never again.